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                           What is this thing....residing in me?
                                          I want it out.
                            They said it could be President.
                           They said I should have this burden.
                                          Why is that?
                      The pain...it was so intense, it kept me up at night.
                              The laws say I must keep it in me.
                                Even though I am only thirteen.
                                            Please, help me.
                                   A bad man put it inside of me.
                            He's away, locked up for ever and ever.
                                 But his face will be on this....thing....
                              And I have to bring it into the world alone.
                            Mommy....it hurt. It hurt...so much....
                                  Why do I have to live with this?
                                I'll see his face when the thing laughs.
                                         He'll be laughing at me.
                                 I couldn't take the pain....I'm sorry....
                              No one wanted to help me get rid of it.
                              They called me a Godless whore and a quitter.
                    So I decided to cut out the pain by myself...with a coat hanger.
                            Now, I'm looking at the blood spreading around me.
                     And the thing, still screaming, is writhing on the coat hanger.
                                                 I took it out.
                                     I'm sorry, but I couldn't take it.
                          I'm starting to feel dizzy....I've lost too much blood.
                       As I fall to the floor, I look at the thing writhing beside me.
                                                   It's a boy.
                      
                            
                            
This is a poem based on :iconkitsuneredwolf:'s picture NO On Prop 4 [link]

I'm a firm believer in the idea that a person's own body is their right to control. It is for this reason that I'm pro-choice.
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Mistwolf4 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Student Artist
One thing you have to say to all pro-lifers: How do they know that the baby's gonna grow up and cure cancer? How do they know that the mother wouldn't have found a cure for cancer. But instead she dies giving birth to something that grows up to become a child molester?
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
Because people fucking suck.
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Mistwolf4 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Student Artist
Well said. :iconclapplz:
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013
Thank you, though I wish I hadn't made that comment in anger like I did. I could have elaborated on WHY people suck, and the shape and context with which their suckiness takes form, and perhaps even offered a solution to the suck or at least the fucking. Ye ken?
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Mistwolf4 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Student Artist
Maybe :P
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Jakomysterio Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm awfully late coming across this piece, but I think you handled the subject well. Despite what that religious zealot says, it's easy to see that you are trying to empathize with the young woman in the poem (regarding the fetus as a thing...etc.). I'm sure you know that it in no way reflects on you as a person, and I figure one stupid comment deserves a good one. The notion of taking away choice really does nothing but create more pain and more loss of life based on the situation above. My wife knows a woman who kept her rape baby and is raising it. She's my hero, and I can hardly conceive of anything more valiant, but trying to force women down that road is tragic, particularly considering that pro-life doesn't mean pro-let's make the foster care system better, or pro-let's make food stamps and WIC more available. They really should change their name to pro-birth. Keep up the good work.
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
Thank you for the lovely comment.

Yes, they really should change it to pro-birth. I might even get behind the pro-life movement a bit if the people who supported it actually supported the other things that could help that baby survive in the world, like free or affordable healthcare and stronger social safety nets.

Hell, they could at least support gay marriage so that more unwanted kids will get adopted into loving families.
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ilovebabies23 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2012
Evil. This is evil, and i hate it.
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Roman-Utopia-Panacea Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013
how is it evil? its expressing what a rape victims thoughts might be.
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ilovebabies23 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
Just because this girl is suffering doesn't mean killing her child is the answer... Abortion is never the answer.
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yes it is. incestual rape, what if the mother dies in childbirth or her health is at risk? i think anyone should be able to make their own choices, just live your life aye.
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ilovebabies23 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013
No baby should be killed! It's not a matter of someone's choices when it comes to murder. If you saw a woman beating her child, you would step in and stop her right? Or would you walk on by and say "well it's her choice." Well it's the same thing with abortion.
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if i saw a woman beating a child, I'd wak right by. WHat if the child was a naughty little disrepectul brat? or did something bad? discipline, I would get the hell beat outta me if I screwed up, so I think the kid should learn his lesson and stay in his place.
So abortion is right? sure, just let a little twelve girl old get raped her her father or uncle or something and let the child be born with birth defects, let the mother die since most young girls hardly survive childbirth and let the family live in shame of having incest in their line.
some people need to die.death penalty, execution, life happens, in other words sh*t happens. if you don't want somethign and it affects yor life, then you shouldn't let it right? its like gay marriage. don't like gay marriage? then don't get one! besides, the trauma of being impregnated against your will is dreadul enough, now to have a baby on your hips. your body, your choice.
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ilovebabies23 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
So you support child abuse? No matter how bad a child is behaving, abusing children is WRONG. If you think child abuse is acceptable, then you clearly have some serious issues.
Abortion is evil. Killing an innocent human baby is wrong, whether they are unborn or not. Unborn babies are NOT a part of their mother, they are their own person, and their mother has no right to harm them.
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abortion may be killing. But there are people who get killed by worse things. If it is part of your body and you don't want it, then you don't need to have it. Unborn babies are inside their mother and depend on her for nutrients. They are part of her. If she doesn't want a baby, then she can do what she likes. For fuck's sake, its annoying when the government and religious shit eaters try to tell you what you can and can't do.
Child abuse and Discipline, I support Discipline however with the recent laws bing decided (such as labeling spanking as abuse) it seems that laying one finger on a stupid punk can count as abuse. Hardships make a person grow in life. What you think is abuse may be what I think is discipline.
Children are not all as innocent as society has them seen.
I don't have issues, if I see a little brat talking back to his own mother, then I personally while not giving a damn about who's child it is, will back-hand slap the little kid across his face.
People these days spoil and pamper their children too much, especially in America.
Since you say that supporting abortion is supporting child abuse, then you supporting pro-life means you support incest, pedophilia, and rape. You know why? Because you will never give the victim any peace without making them feel like they have to deal with the punishment of being forced to carry a child or have redemption for the criminal that forcibly misused and abused their body.
And if that's so, then I think we all know who has the issues here...
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012
:iconpalpatineplz: Gooood. Let the hate flow through you.
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Whitewiccan Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010
i like this a lot ^_^ kudos for the bravery to think and speak on something so controversial. you know i think these kinds of debates would be so much simpler if people learned to keep religion out of it. lol
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
Yeah, but people can't help themselves. If somebody truly believes they're in the right, there's almost no stopping them until they realize for themselves how silly they're acting.
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Whitewiccan Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
true words. Being closed minded is a disease.
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
Yeah.
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BellaKazza Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010
Damn evil as hell.
That child is not a "thing" just because someone raped her does not mean she should kill him, it makes her just as bad as the rapeist.
The baby is innocent why kill him?
Pro-Life and Proud.
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TyepiandSamuel Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't think you understand. Being a woman myself, I can imagine vividly how it would feel.

To be raped would hurt like hell (I would be sore for weeks) but then to give birth at 14 would be life-threatening. Lots of women die during childbirth. My future would be ripped to shreds, my reputation would have disappeared  and the doctors wouldn't bat an eyelid at how I feel. To have to carry a painful thing and then give birth to it (possibly dying) would only remind me of the torture of the rape. People don't recover from rape. I would struggle beyond words, having to move out and try to support myself WITH NO MONEY or experience of cooking and washing etc.

It's a really difficult thing to be raped, but then to have to go through raising the thing.
"Mummy, where's daddy"
"He's somewhere out there, raping other poor people. You'll never see him"

Imagine how the child would feel. Unwanted.

And don't give me that "You can put it into adoption" shit. Every year, 750,000 children are put into care. In a lifetime, only 200,000 are ever adopted. That leaves 350,000 without a family.

The baby is not innocent. Abortion is painless for both (The woman might be sore for a little while though) and is a better choice. It doesn't make the woman (or girl depending on how young she was when she was raped) as bad as the rapist.

"You are not a man for making a baby, you are a man by raising it."
-Barack Obama.

Thank you very much.
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010
As much as it goes against my beliefs to say this, you're a boy. You wouldn't understand. I'm a boy, too, but at least I can understand on some oblique level. Maybe it's because my dick is smaller or something, I don't know.

Let me try to put this into terms you can understand: Say somebody stole your artwork(I know it seems stupid to compare a baby to art, but it's the only thing I can think of that you might empathize with), then completely changed the style or the idea, and made billions of dollars off of it. Would you want to go to the store and buy such an abomination? Would you like it? Would you consider the artist better because he/she raped your work and ruined your vision? It's kind of like that. To know that the product of an evil act is out there(because she obviously wouldn't keep it, she would've killed herself if she had to), unwanted and afraid, confused and hurt because it was abandoned by somebody who couldn't bear the strain of seeing it every day and remembering that it got there at the expense of her innocence in a moment of fear and pain, to know that out there is a child that nobody could truly love because it was spawned from hate. Death would be much more humane than having this child be slowly abandoned by the world, having it's sadness turning into resentment, resentment turning into hate, and hate turning into more violence.

At least with a premature death, from your point of view, it's in the care of God, rather than letting the circumstances of it's unfortunate survival condemn it to Hell.

Also, like I've said before, I consider a life to be defined by experiences and knowledge gained, not by a pulse. If that baby was born, thrown into a dark room for thirty years with no education, no contact from the outside world, no life, and then shot in the head by a person it's never seen holding a thing it doesn't recognize in a things it has but doesn't know the names of, I would still consider it an abortion. It would be sad, just as all abortions are to me, because the child never had a chance to be good, but it also never had a chance to be bad. It was simply flesh with a faint glimmer of a conscience and possibly a slim trickle of deductive reasoning(if it learned how to feed itself, that is).

You say it's evil, I say it's an act of mercy.
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BellaKazza Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2010
First of all I have a much better understanding then you about this. If my wife had a child that was not mine (Because she was raped) then i would take care of that child and love that child because every child is a gift from god.
Every child has a right to live, the mother does not deside if the child lives or dies.
Every child that gets killed deserved to live because god put them down here to live.

Killing children an act of mercy? I think not.
Killing a child is like killing a full grown man, its evil.
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Roman-Utopia-Panacea Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013
look, I've known someone who was made pregnant through rape and let me tell you, it did not end well. You seem to think that giving birth is simple, like a woman can just pop a baby out from her uterus.
That pregant raped girl I knew, first of all, the experiance of being a virgin raped is already traumatizing enough, it gives you a feeling of weakness and inferiority, like you have been reduced to nothing. it feels as if theres no god or hope or anything. you feel like you have some sort of disease inside you, like you are nothing more than a slave to the man. you couldn't possibly understand, since you're a man. it makes you feel less than human.
secondly, to find out that something the man you hate put somehting in you that will grow up to be related to him, that will be of the man's blood and flesh, you will see the man's face as the baby's and everytime you look at your child, you'd be sick and you hate it.
that old tale that all mother's love their child is a lie and false.
the girl i knew, she changed a lot after the incident. but she was denied abortion by her family. And now, she didn't keep the baby but she's so full of hate now just because she KNOWS the baby is alive, happy, and running with the blood of the rapist. She hates her life, not to mention the horrible things people say behind her back because of it. she was never the same and i don't think she ever will be.
and don't you dare say its a gift from god, because god's gift would never be to be impregnated by a sick-minded male and forced to painfully and torturously conceaive his child and not even get to raise it.
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2010
What if the child came from your wife cheating on you? And he grew up to be a gay satanist?

Would you love him then? Would you still stand by your decision?

And just because YOU would be able to stand seeing the product of evil doesn't mean your wife would. Would you make her have a baby that a monster put inside her? Would you really force her to go through with that? I'll let you in on a little secret. She would kill herself. And it would be all your fault. =]
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BellaKazza Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2010
That child may be born from the worst man on the planet!
But the child is not evil! If the child becames someone evil then then i would have failed. But my child will not be evil because i will raise him up right.
But i will love my child no matter what he does.
If you are going to be foolish beliveing that a child is evil if his father is a rapist. Then you are foolish.
The baby should not be punished for what another man does.
No matter what a baby should not be killed for any reason.
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2010
You keep hitting me with the same line. It doesn't matter what shouldbe. All that matters is what will be, and if you attempt to raise a child who was the product of your wife's rape, no matter how much love you might give him, your wife will always hate him because he reminds her of the rapist. Not only will he have the rapist's features, his very existence will constantly bring her back to that time, when she was at her most vulnerable and afraid. To torture your wife like that is probably even worse than the act of rape itself.

This fact is the most exemplified in the line: "I'll see his face when the thing laughs. He'll be laughing at me."

You stupid, fundamentalist twat!
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BellaKazza Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010
You know whats worse then rape, spilling innocent blood like barbarians. There was a woman who was raped by a man and the woman got pregnent she keep him and 30 years later that baby became a man and now takes care of his mother.
That man now has a wife and kids.
And his mother loves him, Because she knew right from wrong.
Now tell me do you?
In the USA we have gone back to an evil time where we kill innocent people every day, and supporting that evil and calling it "Pro choise" its called killing innocent children that have no way to stop you.
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010
Who was this woman, first of all. Because I want to meet the woman who is immune to being traumatized by rape.

You know what's worse than murder? Torture. Torturing somebody simply because of their biology and your spiritual beliefs.

There is no such thing as right or wrong, only what we justify as a society. We do not justify rape. However, we do justify the happiness and freedom of women to choose what to do with her own body.

Maybe a sick fuck fundie like you would rather have it reversed, but that's just the way it is in this country. Accept it.
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hellhoundzero Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2009
Admittedly since becoming a father it has made me a bit more pro life but this makes sense to me. I mean who is the government to tell people what to do with their bodies? Especially, in an intstance like rape. It's a very touchy subject but you were very eloquent with your approach of it...
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2009
Thank you. I can understand how it would feel to a parent with a child that they love, but I believe that a life is defined by experiences, not a pulse. I'm proud to hear that you have a child. :)
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hellhoundzero Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2009
True enough. I know plenty of people who would fit the description of "just a pulse"...heh
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
XD I think I might fit that description, but I dream. I'm capable of complex thought and reasoning. I suppose I count as a ruined life rather than a potential one, though.
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Paw07 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Lovley work. It gets the point across in such a graphic surreal way.
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009
Thank you. :D You should check out the original pic, though...much more inspiring and sad....
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Paw07 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, it is a wonderful piece, I have seen it before. :D
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
Good. :D
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VioletBoo831 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008
This is fantastically written. You did such a wonderful job catching the emotions in this, and the ending caught me by surprise.
Very well done!
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008
Thank you. This kind of subject was new to me.....so I'm glad it caught somebody's positive attention. Check out the picture that spawned the idea.
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VioletBoo831 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008
I just did... you told the story perfectly. What a powerful image as well!
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008
I know, right? :iconkitsuneredwolf: is amazing....you shold check out her other stuff as well. :D
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VioletBoo831 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2008
:nod:
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KitsuneRedWolf Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2008  Student Digital Artist
I like it, but it scares me how real it is. It pierces deep...
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crookedalley Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2008
I don't know if that's a good thing or a bad thing. I mean, my whole business is scary....you can look at my other stories/poems to figure that out, but I've never really tackled a subject like this before. Thanks for the comment and fave.^^
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KitsuneRedWolf Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2008  Student Digital Artist
no prob.
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